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Poem: "The Key to My Heart Is Upside Down"
This poem came out of the February 2009 Poetry Fishbowl, inspired by this painting by flutterbychild. It was sponsored by an extra general donation.

The Key to My Heart Is Upside Down
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The key to my heart is upside down.
Each candle stands for a love or friend.
They are not large, and have no renown.
I burn my candles at just one end.

This candle is red, and these ones blue.
The key to my heart is upside down.
Our lives are colored by me and you.
My soul is pink and my skin is brown.

My mind is a village, not a town.
I live for the faces that I know.
The key to my heart is upside down.
It shines like a flame through winter snow.

The world don’t know what to make of me.
What do I care for gold, or a crown?
I love without locks, and I am free.
The key to my heart is upside down.

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je_reviens From: je_reviens Date: February 15th, 2009 07:54 am (UTC) (Link)
This is the first poem of yours I have ever read which I could not read for content. I could not tell you what it was about. It was the first time I just "felt" the words wash over me. It felt like I was being rocked in a gentle sea. Amazing.
ysabetwordsmith From: ysabetwordsmith Date: February 15th, 2009 03:45 pm (UTC) (Link)

*bow, flourish*

I'm happy that it worked for you.

This poem is very allegorical. It talks about a very complex topic, love, by speaking about different parts of it in different places and ways, without connecting all of them too tightly. The rhyme and repetition hold the poem together.
From: eniastoa Date: February 20th, 2009 01:52 am (UTC) (Link)

Re: *bow, flourish*

I had a similar experience ... I grasped what you just said about your poem, and I, too, got a sense of unconstrained embrace from it, but the title phrase just doesn't parse to anything meaningful for me.

I thought of this again today when I saw boozymatic guffawing to a particular image and caption at http://rolcats.com/ -- Eastern-Bloc lolcats translated into English, apparently -- which I could see might be funny, but didn't connect meaningfully enough for me properly get the joke.

This is no criticism of your poem, btw, nor a request for an explanation of the phrase, just an acknowlegement that I can't "get" everything that I think I ought to be able to.
jolantru From: jolantru Date: February 15th, 2009 01:05 pm (UTC) (Link)
Beautiful. :)
ysabetwordsmith From: ysabetwordsmith Date: February 15th, 2009 03:42 pm (UTC) (Link)

Thank you!

I'm glad you like it.
fayanora From: fayanora Date: February 16th, 2009 04:43 am (UTC) (Link)
Cool. :-)
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