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Poem: "The Architects of Love" - The Wordsmith's Forge
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Poem: "The Architects of Love"
This poem was prompted and sponsored by minor_architect ... and I was several verses into it before I realized that I was using the metaphor of architecture in a poem inspired by someone who has "architect" in her username!


The Architects of Love


Love is not
the whole of the arch
through which the days of our lives must pass.

Love is
only the keystone
that holds the pieces together.

We are
the architects
who carve the blocks from sandstone.

We are
the ones who shape
loyalty, desire, fidelity, confidence, hope, reliance.

Our hands
are roughened
by the work of building a life together.

Our hands
are not the same,
yours and mine, skilled at different things.

I carve
the blocks of my being
broad on the outside, narrowing inward.

You carve
the coarse stone
of yourself for the sake of me.

We take
time for each other,
the things I love that you don’t, and vice versa.

We make
time together,
moving in unison, breathing in communion.

We curve
toward each other
like the sides of an arch.

We curve
until we touch,
united by our love.

We are
stronger together
than either would be a pillar apart.

We are
the arch holding the world’s weight
so that our days may pass freely through the center.

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From: minor_architect Date: February 11th, 2009 03:12 am (UTC) (Link)
I was several verses into it before I realized that I was using the metaphor of architecture in a poem inspired by someone who has "architect" in her username!

...and I only noticed this when you pointed it out! Yeesh, how clueless am I?!

Fantastic poem, though! :D
ysabetwordsmith From: ysabetwordsmith Date: February 11th, 2009 04:01 am (UTC) (Link)

*laugh*

Oh dear! Well, I'm glad you like the poem.
wyrmwwd From: wyrmwwd Date: February 11th, 2009 04:28 am (UTC) (Link)
Very nice. This spoke to me.
ysabetwordsmith From: ysabetwordsmith Date: February 11th, 2009 04:29 am (UTC) (Link)

Yay!

I'm happy that it spoke to you. This poem takes a different perspective of love than the usual.
wyrmwwd From: wyrmwwd Date: February 11th, 2009 04:32 am (UTC) (Link)

Re: Yay!

Yes, and so do I. It was good to see someone kind of feeling that.
From: shadowofiris Date: February 11th, 2009 07:16 am (UTC) (Link)
I like the metaphor! Neat image.

best wishes,
matt at shadowofiris.com
fayanora From: fayanora Date: February 11th, 2009 08:32 am (UTC) (Link)
This is pretty awesome!
lizamanynames From: lizamanynames Date: February 11th, 2009 09:54 pm (UTC) (Link)
Oooooooooh, that's so beautiful. *sniff*
anamacha From: anamacha Date: February 13th, 2009 05:36 pm (UTC) (Link)
I like it ... than ks for sharing :) I would have liked it better, I think, had you avoided use of the word 'love' altogether, but that mayh have been nearly impossible.

That's just me -- I prefer love poems that don't use the obvious words.
ysabetwordsmith From: ysabetwordsmith Date: February 14th, 2009 01:49 am (UTC) (Link)

Hmm...

>> I would have liked it better, I think, had you avoided use of the word 'love' altogether, but that mayh have been nearly impossible. <<

Impossible, no, but it's not what I was aiming for in this particular poem. If you like that sort of thing, feel free to suggest it as a prompt some time. I enjoy a challenge.

>> I prefer love poems that don't use the obvious words.<<

There are some rhyme pairs that are considered poor choices because they're overused, like "love/dove" and "breath/death." Thing is, they're overused because of bottlenecks in the language, where an important word has few rhymes. I don't consider them unusable myself, but I do tend to handle them a little more carefully to make sure they don't sound clunky or obvious.

Anyhow, these are points often raised in literary circles; you're welcome to explore them further if you wish.
anamacha From: anamacha Date: February 14th, 2009 02:02 am (UTC) (Link)

Re: Hmm...

indeed. Explore them further ... where?

When I wrote poems -- which I've not done in far too long, I'll freely admit -- I too avoided such things. As you say, they are that way because of literary bottlenecks, but I would usually endeavor to find different words altogether, rather than merely taking 'the easy way out.'

ysabetwordsmith From: ysabetwordsmith Date: February 14th, 2009 02:12 am (UTC) (Link)

Re: Hmm...

>> Explore them further ... where? <<

Here, if you'd like a place to discuss them.
anamacha From: anamacha Date: February 14th, 2009 02:33 am (UTC) (Link)

Re: Hmm...

I'm game!
From: ext_169662 Date: February 22nd, 2009 09:01 pm (UTC) (Link)
Elizabeth, this is so beautiful! Both the concept and the imagery. Very inspiring.
ysabetwordsmith From: ysabetwordsmith Date: February 22nd, 2009 09:13 pm (UTC) (Link)

Thank you!

I'm glad you like it. I have a lot of poetry posted here (click the "poem" tag to see it) and more is added every month.
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