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Poem: "The Tree of Damocles"
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siege From: siege Date: December 23rd, 2018 02:24 am (UTC) (Link)
Awesome stuff! I thought of dialecticdreamer's stone-mosaic tree userpic when Shiv described his tree.

I did notice a couple of errors, though. You have a copy/paste error where you've duplicated a section starting at
"That's wonderful!" Tolli said.
"What does yours look like?"


Then there's a verb tense error in this line:
Simon lay a scrap of plaid ribbon
over the plain green wrapping paper.
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