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Poem: "When Someone Is Vulnerable"
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ysabetwordsmith From: ysabetwordsmith Date: May 15th, 2016 01:28 am (UTC) (Link)

Re: Detailed Feedback from alatefeline

>> Whatever it was, it probably
wasn't anything a hospital
could fix. Ansel and Turq
had gone over that before,
because Turq's superpowers
tended to tear up his body.


Yep. Thanks for the recap. If the character didn’t remember it in the moment of crisis, I as the reader wouldn’t. <<

I appreciate that bit of feedback. One of the things I'm trying to track, because Terramagne is just getting to where they have enough density of input to identify patterns, is what things can be tended with conventional care and what can't. If a strongman has a failure of protective field and rips a muscle loose, a hospital can fix it because it's still just a ripped muscle. But if a tough guy has the same problem, that's difficult or impossible to fix without specialized equipment, which few facilities carry because there's not much demand for it. Soup care is a specialized field that is just beginning to coalesce and I've only got a handful of characters doing enough to have built up a real skill in it. Turq's problems tend to diffuse throughout a significant part of his body, and they're not static, the Regeneration will put things back together eventually. But the acute effects can be miserable and terrifying in the meantime.

Interestingly, there is one thing that would've been useful that didn't come up, because Ansel hadn't stocked it and Ethan could fix the problem faster by hand. Supplemental oxygen. Turq's problems hit his chest often enough for that to be worth asking if he can tolerate it. Ansel will probably think of it after the fact.

>> Ansel dug out his phone
and called Ethan Wheeler,
the healer who had worked
with him before


Backup is good. <<

Yeah, and Ethan is a lot better than he realizes.

>> "I've got him," Ethan said as
he knelt beside Ansel and put
his hands on Turq's limp body.
"I can keep him breathing, as
long as his lungs are intact.”


Whew! We are moving from survival crisis to medical treatment crisis. Even that is a relief…which knowing the delightfully devious author, means something is going to up the tension again soon in an appropriate rhythm. <<

:D *bows to Master Tolkien* I learned Hurt/Comfort from the best.
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