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Poem: "Jonah's Landing" - The Wordsmith's Forge
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Poem: "Jonah's Landing"
One of the things I had in mind for this Journal was using it to promote my poetry by posting occasional poems here. (On poems and other creative endeavors, feedback is especially welcome, though not required.) janetmiles asked about the edible starship, so I tracked down the character and found out what happened...


Jonah’s Landing



Carusian starships were legendary for speed
And frugality, single-use transportation to a new life.
Verne bought one, down on his luck and convinced its
Edibility would lower the cost of feeding his colonists
All through their first year. The Carusians told him
To butcher it promptly on landing. He agreed.

Everything went well until the colonists disembarked.
Most of them scattered to inflate their own homes,
Pride taking precedence over promises. Frustrated,
Their captain threw up his hands and let them go.
Only two pink moons, staring at the newcomers, saw the
Rapacious starship devour its crew that night.

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haikujaguar From: haikujaguar Date: June 9th, 2007 12:34 pm (UTC) (Link)
!!

You didn't say it was a carnivorous starship!
janetmiles From: janetmiles Date: June 9th, 2007 01:41 pm (UTC) (Link)
Neither, apparently, did the Carusians.
ysabetwordsmith From: ysabetwordsmith Date: June 9th, 2007 03:06 pm (UTC) (Link)
*laugh* I didn't know it was carnivorous until I wrote the poem.

When I unpacked the preserved idea, it went something like this:

Why would there be an edible starship?

Well, it would save money. You could eat it instead of something else, so you'd have more room for non-food baggage, and living ships could breed instead of being built.

Then what are the drawbacks?

Oh. It's hungry by the time it lands. Yeah, that's a BIG one.
dakiwiboid From: dakiwiboid Date: June 9th, 2007 03:24 pm (UTC) (Link)

EEEEEE!!!!!!!!!!

Here I was picturing some sort of candy-ish polymer. Drat! Your idea makes more sense from a biotechnology standpoint, though. By the way, my current temp assignment would provide you endless inspiration and amusement. I'm filling in for someone who tracks invoices for a lab at Sigma-Aldrich. I put a record in the database yesterday for a particular type of rat IGG protein, and among the warnings was one that stated that if the protein came in contact with copper plumbing, an explosion might take place. Last night, I posted to 42answers: "This lab rat may explode." We'll see what sort of questions that elicits!
ysabetwordsmith From: ysabetwordsmith Date: June 9th, 2007 04:36 pm (UTC) (Link)

Re: EEEEEE!!!!!!!!!!

I did consider a nonliving, edible substance. Bees make honeycomb, for example, and eat the wax later to recycle it; some other insects spin cocoons or whatnot and eat those after use. That sort of thing would lead to a different -- and probably fictional rather than poetic -- rendition. I'll keep it in mind as a future possibility.
tuftears From: tuftears Date: June 11th, 2007 10:34 pm (UTC) (Link)
Haha! Well done.

Perhaps it's my poor sense of meter and rhyme, but I can't make it out, what's the meter/system for this?
ysabetwordsmith From: ysabetwordsmith Date: June 11th, 2007 11:56 pm (UTC) (Link)
This poem is not written in a regular meter, nor does it rhyme. (I do love meter and rhyme, and I collect poetic forms. You'll see more of that over time.) It does have a form other than free verse, though. I just didn't mention what the form is, to see if anyone would spot it.
From: (Anonymous) Date: July 5th, 2007 12:14 am (UTC) (Link)

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From: (Anonymous) Date: July 5th, 2007 11:47 pm (UTC) (Link)

The Form of This Poem

Someone asked earlier about the form of this poem, and I wanted to wait a while in case anyone spotted it on their own. This is an acrostic poem. Look down the left margin and you'll see a hidden message.
From: (Anonymous) Date: July 13th, 2007 07:09 am (UTC) (Link)

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