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Poem: "Shouldermates"
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alycewilson From: alycewilson Date: December 7th, 2013 03:50 am (UTC) (Link)
I like where this went at the end; I couldn't have seen that coming.
ysabetwordsmith From: ysabetwordsmith Date: December 7th, 2013 04:01 am (UTC) (Link)

Yay!

I'm glad this worked for you. I wanted to go somewhere different than the usual "shoulder angel and shoulder devil hate each other" trope. I figured after all that time, they might form a bond, and once that happens, it changes where they fit into the universe.
alycewilson From: alycewilson Date: December 7th, 2013 07:05 am (UTC) (Link)

Re: Yay!

I like the metaphysical nature of it, how they are recognized as a yin-yang of the universe.

I also like how the short lines evokes the size of the devil and angel.
ysabetwordsmith From: ysabetwordsmith Date: December 8th, 2013 07:53 am (UTC) (Link)

Re: Yay!

>> I like the metaphysical nature of it, how they are recognized as a yin-yang of the universe. <<

That was something I aimed for ...

>> I also like how the short lines evokes the size of the devil and angel. <<

... but this was accidental.
alycewilson From: alycewilson Date: December 8th, 2013 08:58 pm (UTC) (Link)

Re: Yay!

That's the beauty of poetry: interpretation.
ysabetwordsmith From: ysabetwordsmith Date: December 8th, 2013 08:59 pm (UTC) (Link)

Re: Yay!

Agreed! I love seeing what people make of my work.
alycewilson From: alycewilson Date: December 8th, 2013 09:01 pm (UTC) (Link)

Re: Yay!

Me,too. Especially when they find aspects that add a depth to it I didn't realize was there.
ysabetwordsmith From: ysabetwordsmith Date: December 8th, 2013 09:06 pm (UTC) (Link)

Re: Yay!

I have deep readers. It's not rare for them to find well-hidden eastereggs, and occasionally they find one I didn't realize I had placed!
From: technoshaman Date: December 7th, 2013 04:02 am (UTC) (Link)
She's *very* good at endings. :)
ysabetwordsmith From: ysabetwordsmith Date: December 7th, 2013 04:03 am (UTC) (Link)

Thank you!

*bow, flourish* Happy to be of service.
alycewilson From: alycewilson Date: December 7th, 2013 07:03 am (UTC) (Link)
Yes, and narrative poetry, which is something I need to work on more myself.
ysabetwordsmith From: ysabetwordsmith Date: December 8th, 2013 07:56 am (UTC) (Link)

Thank you!

I've always enjoyed narrative poetry. The Science Fiction Poetry Handbook is a good guide.
alycewilson From: alycewilson Date: December 8th, 2013 08:50 pm (UTC) (Link)

Re: Thank you!

Thanks for the suggestion. I'll add it to my "to read" list.
alycewilson From: alycewilson Date: December 8th, 2013 08:56 pm (UTC) (Link)

Re: Thank you!

Drat. I think it might be out of print. Any suggestions on how to get hold of a copy?
ysabetwordsmith From: ysabetwordsmith Date: December 8th, 2013 09:05 pm (UTC) (Link)

Re: Thank you!

Try searching on ABE Books.

Here's a simple guide to narrative poetry.

Also you might like my articles on how to write serial poetry. That's usually narrative, so some of the information will carry over well to single narrative poems.
alycewilson From: alycewilson Date: December 8th, 2013 10:39 pm (UTC) (Link)

Re: Thank you!

Thanks a lot! Very useful links.
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