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Poem: "Whose Guardian"

Here is today's freebie.  It was inspired by a prompt from rix_scaedu.  It also fills the "atonement" square in my 8-12-13 card for the Hurt/Comfort Bingo fest.  This poem belongs to the series Fledgling Grace.


Whose Guardian


"Run,"  a voice whispers,
and the woman runs
before the man's hands
can close around her.

"You're in danger,"
a voice warns,
and the boy escapes
before the man can hit him.

When the police come
to collect the fledermaus
for previous crimes,

his guardian angel is grateful
and breathes no word of warning.

It is his place to stand guard
not over his charge,
but over his charge's victims.

"It's so hard,"  the guardian angel says.
"I thought it would get easier
now that people can hear me better."

The archangel
folds a shining wing around him
and replies, "If it were easy,
it would do little to expunge your sins."

The criminal, whose guardian angel
used to be a murderer before repenting,
glares poisonously at the police.

"Watch him,"  the angel warns them.
"He means to hurt you if he can."

The police load their captive
carefully into the patrol car,
never taking their eyes off him.

"Have faith,"  the archangel says.
"You are doing well."

The guardian angel nods,
gliding away to follow his charge
and keep safe those who must go near him.
It is enough to know that in some small way
this atones for the sins of the past.

It is not always obvious
whose guardian an angel is,
but it is always just.

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aldersprig From: aldersprig Date: December 4th, 2013 02:24 am (UTC) (Link)
A intriguing idea!
ysabetwordsmith From: ysabetwordsmith Date: December 4th, 2013 02:27 am (UTC) (Link)

Thank you!

I'm glad you liked this.
thnidu From: thnidu Date: December 4th, 2013 04:01 am (UTC) (Link)
Intriguing idea and intriguing poem.
ysabetwordsmith From: ysabetwordsmith Date: December 4th, 2013 09:40 am (UTC) (Link)

Thank you!

I'm glad you liked this.
mdlbear From: mdlbear Date: December 4th, 2013 05:34 am (UTC) (Link)
Nice twist.
ysabetwordsmith From: ysabetwordsmith Date: December 4th, 2013 05:52 am (UTC) (Link)

Thank you!

I'm glad you like it.
rix_scaedu From: rix_scaedu Date: December 4th, 2013 05:54 am (UTC) (Link)
I'm glad it turned out so well!
ysabetwordsmith From: ysabetwordsmith Date: December 4th, 2013 05:59 am (UTC) (Link)

Yay!

I'm glad this worked for you.
From: technoshaman Date: December 4th, 2013 07:35 am (UTC) (Link)
Okay. We know why angel. Why this mortal?
ysabetwordsmith From: ysabetwordsmith Date: December 4th, 2013 09:22 pm (UTC) (Link)

Well...

I think it's something that can happen to anyone who makes a serious habit of hurting other people. They might get a guardian angel to warn away potential victims. The guardians are drawn from a pool of souls who used to do that sort of thing but are now sorry for it and want to make amends.
From: kangaekaeru Date: December 4th, 2013 03:37 pm (UTC) (Link)
That's a very cool inversion.
ysabetwordsmith From: ysabetwordsmith Date: December 4th, 2013 09:02 pm (UTC) (Link)

Thank you!

I'm glad you liked this.
elliemurasaki From: elliemurasaki Date: December 4th, 2013 03:54 pm (UTC) (Link)
Ooooh.
ysabetwordsmith From: ysabetwordsmith Date: December 4th, 2013 09:03 pm (UTC) (Link)

Thank you!

I'm glad this worked for you.
starcat_jewel From: starcat_jewel Date: December 4th, 2013 05:39 pm (UTC) (Link)
I really like this take on the "guardian angel" idea, and wish it were true.
ysabetwordsmith From: ysabetwordsmith Date: December 4th, 2013 08:40 pm (UTC) (Link)

Well...

Maybe it does happen sometimes. Have you ever met someone who creeped you right the fuck out? Or heard a little voice warning you to get away from them?
lb_lee From: lb_lee Date: December 13th, 2013 02:44 am (UTC) (Link)
I like this interpretation on the guardian angel, especially coming from a 'Gift of Fear' background. A very nice little fantasy explanation for the inner alarm bells!

--Rogan
ysabetwordsmith From: ysabetwordsmith Date: December 13th, 2013 02:49 am (UTC) (Link)

Thank you!

I'm glad you enjoyed this. Prompts that come with a twist included are likely to appeal to me -- and of course, I like coming up with explanations for things that happen.
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