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Poem: "Picking Up the Trash"
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kelkyag From: kelkyag Date: August 22nd, 2013 09:33 pm (UTC) (Link)
The fourth-to-last verse appears to be missing its first line, or possibly more?

Shepherds are responsible for sheep, which are in need of even more minding than drunks -- the domesticated varieties can be pretty hapless. I can't say I blame them for prioritizing their charges over random humans.
tigerbright From: tigerbright Date: August 22nd, 2013 10:59 pm (UTC) (Link)
Shaeth is something of an all-or-nothing guy, too.
ysabetwordsmith From: ysabetwordsmith Date: August 22nd, 2013 11:01 pm (UTC) (Link)

Yes...

He can be that. Also, former God of Evil: his grasp of appropriate behavior is patchy.
thnidu From: thnidu Date: August 23rd, 2013 01:42 am (UTC) (Link)

Missing line or stanza(s)?

You beat me to it, kelkyag.

May I ask -- and I mean that literally! -- the origin of your LJID?

Dr. Whom: Consulting Linguist, Grammarian, Orthoëpist, and Philological Busybody
kelkyag From: kelkyag Date: August 23rd, 2013 05:28 am (UTC) (Link)
Kelkyag was the name of the character I played in a role playing game rather a long time ago. 'Twas also a convenient seemingly unique string to use when the 'net got busy enough that my preferred username was no longer reliably available.
thnidu From: thnidu Date: August 23rd, 2013 02:50 pm (UTC) (Link)
Quite similar here. I had a D&D 2nd Edn. mage with (of course) a very long name, of which Thnidu is the short form. It's just off the edge of English phonology: we have native "sn-, sm-" (snort, smile) and loanword "shn-, shm-" (schnozz, schmuck), but no "thn-" or "fn-"; I'm not counting "fnord". And there was nothing else "thnidu" on the Net.
ysabetwordsmith From: ysabetwordsmith Date: August 23rd, 2013 07:17 pm (UTC) (Link)

Well...

It always reminds me of "You need a thneed!" Dr. Seuss was a consummate linguist but every once in a while he'd break the rules of English and ... nobody would notice, because he was all the time throwing in weird words or names that did follow the morphological rules.
thnidu From: thnidu Date: August 24th, 2013 04:26 am (UTC) (Link)

Re: Well...

Heh! :-)
ysabetwordsmith From: ysabetwordsmith Date: August 23rd, 2013 10:18 pm (UTC) (Link)

Re: Missing line or stanza(s)?

The missing line is now fixed!
ysabetwordsmith From: ysabetwordsmith Date: August 23rd, 2013 04:03 am (UTC) (Link)

Thoughts

>> The fourth-to-last verse appears to be missing its first line, or possibly more? <<

Fixed, thanks.

>> Shepherds are responsible for sheep, which are in need of even more minding than drunks -- the domesticated varieties can be pretty hapless. <<

That's true. However, he was inside the shanty at the time, not actually herding the sheep.

>>I can't say I blame them for prioritizing their charges over random humans.<<

It is widely, though not universally, considered uncivilized to walk past someone in need of help without helping. Refusing to share a shelter during a storm ranges from impolite to grounds for exile, depending on culture. And you never know when the offended party will be capable of kicking your ass, as in this case.
kelkyag From: kelkyag Date: August 23rd, 2013 05:59 am (UTC) (Link)
Refusing to share shelter in a storm is a much larger offense, yes.

Paranoid big city upbringing says a person appearing possibly in need of help on the street is as likely to be a threat. :-/
ysabetwordsmith From: ysabetwordsmith Date: August 23rd, 2013 06:05 am (UTC) (Link)

Well...

>> Paranoid big city upbringing says a person appearing possibly in need of help on the street is as likely to be a threat. :-/ <<

That has always been a concern; bandits used to lie down beside or on a road to make people stop. Thing is, if the members of your society don't stop to help each other at need -- if ignoring harm is the routine response rather than a fluke -- it means your culture is coming apart at the seams. A lack of compassion is very corrosive, and it's a serious problem in big cities.
kelkyag From: kelkyag Date: August 23rd, 2013 06:40 am (UTC) (Link)
Yes.
rowyn From: rowyn Date: August 23rd, 2013 04:05 pm (UTC) (Link)
I feel kinda bad for the shepherd, too. But I don't expect the former God of Evil to be a good example of proper behavior, even if he's making an effort to mend his ways now. :)
ysabetwordsmith From: ysabetwordsmith Date: August 23rd, 2013 06:55 pm (UTC) (Link)

Well...

>> I feel kinda bad for the shepherd, too. <<

Getting thrown out in the rain is unpleasant and potentially hazardous. However, when you act like a selfish jerk, sometimes that has negative consequences.

>> But I don't expect the former God of Evil to be a good example of proper behavior, even if he's making an effort to mend his ways now. :) <<

Exactly. Shaeth is just getting to where he can do a good thing now and then, and some of that will be on purpose. He still doesn't understand the idea of Good very well, and can't always recognize it, let alone practice it with regularity. And socially appropriate behavior is even farther out of reach, as it goes into more arbitrary and variable areas.
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