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Poem: "The Launch at Bubastis"
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thnidu From: thnidu Date: April 8th, 2013 05:17 am (UTC) (Link)
forked parallels: I like this. I gather that the name refers to the parallel structure of the 2nd and 3rd lines of most of the stanzas:

For it turned out that the spells to fly through the sky
     could only be written by humans with thumbs,
     could only be cast     by Bast's chosen creatures.

And interesting that this is a semantic/syntactic parallelism, unlike the phonological parallelisms (rhyme, alliteration, assonance, &c.) basic to European traditional verse forms, but very like the parallelism used in another Afro-Asiatic language, Biblical Hebrew:

Lord, who may dwell in your sanctuary?
     Who may live on your holy hill?

He whose walk is blameless
     and who does what is righteous.

who speaks the truth from his heart
     and has no slander on his tongue.

who does his neighbor no wrong
     and casts no slur on his fellow man.

(Psalm 15:1-3, as analyzed here)


Edited at 2013-04-08 05:18 am (UTC)
ysabetwordsmith From: ysabetwordsmith Date: April 8th, 2013 06:45 am (UTC) (Link)

Yes...

You're right on the mark with the analysis of forked parallels. Sorry I forgot to include the reference for that, it's linked now. Having looked up that material while researching the Shu, I'm likely to use it for the originating cultures as well.
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