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Poem: "It Comes First and Follows After"
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From: rhodielady_47 Date: September 20th, 2012 08:54 pm (UTC) (Link)
Now that's a poem which will leave you thoughtful. You did a wonderful job on building the mood throughout it--very consistant--and that's hard to do.
Good Job!
:)
ysabetwordsmith From: ysabetwordsmith Date: September 20th, 2012 09:55 pm (UTC) (Link)

Thank you!

>> Now that's a poem which will leave you thoughtful. <<

That's the idea.

>> You did a wonderful job on building the mood throughout it--very consistant--and that's hard to do. <<

I like mood poems, though I don't write a lot of them. They require careful construction, because the effect works better when shown than when told. I tend to base mine on little concrete details and word choice.
From: rhodielady_47 Date: September 21st, 2012 05:17 am (UTC) (Link)

Re: Thank you!

"I tend to base mine on little concrete details and word choice."
And it works beautifully.
Most people still have trouble with the concept of "It ain't what you say, it's how you say it," so they are clueless as to why a poem like this works.
:)

ysabetwordsmith From: ysabetwordsmith Date: September 21st, 2012 05:26 am (UTC) (Link)

Re: Thank you!

Yes, mood pieces require subtlety. kajones_writing is doing a call for prompts and the autumn theme really led me in that direction. She handles introspection well too.
From: rhodielady_47 Date: September 21st, 2012 06:41 am (UTC) (Link)

Re: Thank you!

You definitely have the knack for it.
:D
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