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Poem: "Couched"

This poem came from the September 18, 2012 Poetry Fishbowl.  It was inspired by a prompt from rix_scaedu.  It has been sponsored by janetmiles.  This poem belongs to the series Monster House, which you can explore further via the Serial Poetry page.


I'd been working on the porch all day,
rehanging the swing and
fixing loose spindles in the rail.

I went back inside and
sprawled out in the living room.
It was comfortable and quiet.

My girl was out on a consulting gig
but even so, the place was starting
to seem more like a home than a house
and we were starting to feel like a family,
though we hadn't couched it in such terms yet.

I thought about getting up
to take a shower, really should,
yeah, any minute now.
Definitely before she gets home.

The hide-a-bed couch was soft, comfortable,
like a cloud swallowing me down and down.
A cooling breeze played over my skin and
the shirt still damp from a sweaty afternoon's work.
I shivered.  Should get up and close the window.

Furry arms reached out from beneath the couch
as the monster under the bed pulled the aghan over me.
The little old lady ghost shut the window.

The air was warm and still.
I snuggled deeper into the afghan.
I could always get up ... later.

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janetmiles From: janetmiles Date: September 20th, 2012 01:53 am (UTC) (Link)
Aww, everyone should have such considerate roommates.

(Assuming they want roommates at all; I know some people prefer to live alone and would find that kind of caretaking more smothery than comfortable.)
ysabetwordsmith From: ysabetwordsmith Date: September 20th, 2012 03:10 am (UTC) (Link)


Part of being good housemates, or even just friends, is understanding different people's interaction parameters. What's smothering for one is okay for another; what's giving space for one is ignoring for another. This is where "do unto others as you would have others do unto you" breaks down and pours black smoke from under the hood. People don't all need the same things.

rix_scaedu From: rix_scaedu Date: September 20th, 2012 09:02 am (UTC) (Link)

Re: Yes...

I hope they wake him up in time for that shower. :)
janetmiles From: janetmiles Date: September 20th, 2012 12:58 pm (UTC) (Link)

Re: Yes...

Yeah, that'd be why my current version of the Golden Rule is along the lines of, "Do unto others as you -- in your best judgment -- believe they want to be done unto."
siege From: siege Date: September 20th, 2012 07:04 pm (UTC) (Link)

Re: Yes...

How about "Give as you would like to receive."
janetmiles From: janetmiles Date: September 22nd, 2012 01:08 am (UTC) (Link)

Re: Yes...

Well, no, not necessarily, because (it seems to me) that assumes everyone wants the same things.

When I'm distressed, I generally want to be left alone. Some people, when they're distressed, want to be cuddled or distracted or logicked at. If I treated them the way I would want to be treated, I would be doing them a disservice.

Perhaps I misunderstood, though?
ysabetwordsmith From: ysabetwordsmith Date: September 20th, 2012 10:10 pm (UTC) (Link)

Re: Yes...

e_scapism101 From: e_scapism101 Date: September 20th, 2012 12:32 pm (UTC) (Link)
Oh how I wish I had a little old lady ghost and a couch/bed monster such as these to live at my house!
ysabetwordsmith From: ysabetwordsmith Date: September 20th, 2012 10:36 pm (UTC) (Link)


They're pretty popular.

Here we have a Pagan-eating couch. If you sit down on it and you're more tired than you're admitting, it pretty much won't let you up. We've had a lot of people fall asleep in the living room as a result.
janetmiles From: janetmiles Date: September 22nd, 2012 01:09 am (UTC) (Link)

Re: Yes...

You know, that may explain why I so rarely sit on your couch, but head directly for the rocking chair (unless you have other company who clearly see that as their spot).
ysabetwordsmith From: ysabetwordsmith Date: September 22nd, 2012 03:09 am (UTC) (Link)

Re: Yes...

There are times I move to the rocker too.
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