This poem came out of the September 18, 2012 Poetry Fishbowl. It was inspired by a prompt from kelkyag. It has been sponsored by
janetmiles. This poem belongs to the Monster House series; you can explore that further via the Serial Poetry page. In order for this one to make sense, you should read "Thunder Without Rain" first.
Warning: This is one of the creepier poems in the series. It contains seriously unpleasant entities, some violence, and disconcerting emotional dynamics. If you've been reading Monster House for the fluff, you might want to skip this one. If you like the occasional dark fantasy/horror elements, that's where this poem goes.
It was a scrawny thing, a bit like a drowned rat,
but cute in an ugly way that made me wonder
what it was as I held out the crust of my sandwich.
"Don't feed that," the lurking shadow said sharply,
who hadn't said anything about my sister feeding gremlins
or about the radiator dragon snitching food in the kitchen.
"Why not?" I asked.
"That is a niggling suspicion,"
said the lurking shadow.
"Whatever we feed grows stronger.
We do not want that kind of trouble
getting any bigger than it already is."
I felt sorry for the poor little thing,
but I left it in the alley behind our house.
A week later I saw it riding on a man's shoulder,
head buried under his skin like tick,
body bloated to the size of a soccer ball.
I didn't feel sorry for it anymore.
I felt sorry for him.
The lurking shadow beckoned to me
with a curl of shade under the big tree,
and I drew back into the yard away from them.
"Now you see why I told you not to feed it,"
he said, and I nodded.
Some monsters were safe,
others not so much.
The one that really scared me
was the black cloud that followed
the boy in my sister's class that she didn't like.
He came home with her after school one day,
calling taunts from a few feet behind her.
I jumped off the porch swing
but the lurking shadow swirled in front of me
and said, "You let me deal with this."
As soon as the boy set one foot on our grass,
the lurking shadow pounced from a tree
and knocked the cloud onto the ground.
They rolled and fought, squalling like alley cats,
but the lurking shadow was bigger
and soon the cloud lay tattered on the sidewalk,
leaking something clear as rain.
And the boy,
that awful boy with the dead-fish eyes,
dropped to his knees beside it
like someone had run over his cat.
He held the cloud against his chest
and tried to feed it dark chocolate
from a crumpled candy wrapper.
His cheeks were wet as he carried it away.
"That's the first time I've ever seen him cry,"
my sister said, fingering the purple eye of her necklace.
"I hope I never see it again."
"Me too," I said.
The lurking shadow nodded,
and herded us inside the house.
September 20 2012, 01:50:52 UTC 8 years ago
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September 20 2012, 03:07:40 UTC 8 years ago
It's worth a try, though I don't actually know much about him. He's among the more reclusive characters.
>> You're right, this one was disturbing, but I keep coming back to it. <<
Thank you!
I find it interesting that this series is usually light with a wry twist, sometimes pure fluff, and then occasionlly goes to incredibly dark places.
September 20 2012, 02:08:21 UTC 8 years ago
Thank you!
September 20 2012, 03:02:48 UTC 8 years ago
I'm happy to hear that.
>> (and a little bit thought-provoking too).<<
Me too. I wasn't expecting him to have any kind of emotional attachment like that.
>> I'm with
Well, we can try. He's not the most forthcoming of characters. But if he pops up again, I'll do my best.
September 20 2012, 06:38:12 UTC 8 years ago
Why didn't the lurking shadow do more about the niggling suspicion than discourage feeding it, I wonder?
In Thunder Without Rain, the daughter thought the boy with the dead eyes couldn't see the cloud, but now it seems he can? That ... doesn't seem like a positive development. And I worry about his reaction to this.
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September 20 2012, 07:03:43 UTC 8 years ago
There is always a balance of positive and negative influences in the world. The more you mess with it, the more erratic the whole system becomes. So if you can avoid a disaster simply by stepping out of the way, that's usually a good idea.
>> In Thunder Without Rain, the daughter thought the boy with the dead eyes couldn't see the cloud, but now it seems he can? That ... doesn't seem like a positive development. <<
There are two possibilities: 1) He knew about it before, but didn't show that. Given that they only interacted in public, that's plausible. 2) He may have developed the awareness later, with more exposure.
>> And I worry about his reaction to this. <<
Yeah. Certainly he did something very far out of his usual routine, in revealing that attachment.
The interesting question this raises for me is: does a relationship count as symbiosis if the parties involved feel that they are gaining something from it, even if there is harm involved; or does it only count if there is mutual benefit without harm? Because I don't think they're really all that good for each other, but the attraction seems to be deep and mutual at this point in time.
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September 20 2012, 16:26:48 UTC 8 years ago
They can avoid a direct disaster for themselves, but the disaster the niggling suspicion might cause for someone else has the potential to create a lot of collateral damage which might affect them, even if they don't care about the damage to the person directly affected.
does a relationship count as symbiosis if the parties involved feel that they are gaining something from it, even if there is harm involved; or does it only count if there is mutual benefit without harm
I don't think I know enough about how what the cloud is or does, what's wrong with the boy, or how the two of them interact to make much of a guess. We know from other stories and backstories that what started out as human can become something else, and that what looks human might not be, in this place. That cloud seems like a bad thing for a normal human child, but perhaps that's so unlike what the boy is (now) that that's not a good yardstick -- perhaps they're a crack team of emotional predators, and while that's all kinds of bad for the folks around them, it's a pretty dandy matchup for them.
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September 20 2012, 12:37:31 UTC 8 years ago
Without his darkness, he may not know what or how to be.
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September 21 2012, 02:18:09 UTC 8 years ago
Also, terrifically apt icon.
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September 22 2012, 01:21:28 UTC 8 years ago
Emotional abuse is the "gift" that keeps on giving.
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