This is the second freebie for today's fishbowl session, courtesy of new prompter jb_slasher from Dreamwidth. It was inspired by a prompt from rix_scaedu. This also fills the "Dirty/Messy" square on my card for Cottoncandy_bingo. The poem belongs to the Monster House series, and you can read more about that on the Serial Poetry page.
My son stood at the base of the porch
with his friend Melinda beside him,
both of them covered head to toe in mud
that trickled down their small bodies
to pool beneath their sneakers.
The explanation of this was less than clear,
as he picked at drying flakes on his forearm
and she finger-combed her black hair to rattails,
something about a puddle portal and a dare
and a very friendly earth dragon.
"You," I said to them,
"will go stand by the faucet so I can hose you off.
You are not coming into the house like that."
A muffled chuckle beside me
made me turn to glare at the bogeyman.
"You," I said to him,
"were supposed to be watching them,
by which I meant you were supposed to stop them
from getting into trouble."
"You're a parent," the bogeyman said. "You should know
anything that can be fixed with soap and water
does not qualify as trouble."
At the far end of the yard,
the mud puddle rippled,
clay-colored coils rising and then
subsiding again.
"You," I said to the bogeyman,
and then shook my head.
"Nevermind. Just ... go get the soap."
September 18 2012, 20:39:23 UTC 8 years ago Edited: September 18 2012, 20:39:53 UTC
(Two kids of our own, + a foster.)
September 18 2012, 20:51:52 UTC 8 years ago
Is the pov character here and in the last section of the other the original narrator, or the wife of the original narrator? I've never been sure of the original narrator's gender, and it's usually been obvious from context which of the human adults in the house was the pov character, but this time I don't know.
And I'll second the bogeyman, at least barring occasions when taking the time to clean up and change would create trouble ...
Well...
September 20 2012, 07:05:07 UTC 8 years ago
September 20 2012, 07:43:47 UTC 8 years ago
The other, I'm less sure I caught the change correctly, but the original narrator say "my girl" and "my wife", whereas I'm not sure we've ever heard Madame the Computer Geek refer to her spouse in a gendered way? Also, I think it might like a "my" before "ear".
Do you know the original narrator's gender/prefered pronouns/...? Does they prefer not to say? The only thing I can think of that pushed one way or the other was that the wife's morning sickness seemed to be something of a surprise, but that leaves plenty of room still for explanations other than the original narrator being (biologically) male.
September 19 2012, 09:04:13 UTC 8 years ago
Yes...
September 20 2012, 05:23:24 UTC 8 years ago
Re: Yes...
September 20 2012, 08:41:45 UTC 8 years ago
September 19 2012, 13:35:48 UTC 8 years ago
Thank you!
September 20 2012, 03:46:09 UTC 8 years ago
September 19 2012, 18:15:48 UTC 8 years ago
Lovely work!
Thank you!
September 20 2012, 04:24:11 UTC 8 years ago
September 29 2012, 10:23:51 UTC 8 years ago
anything that can be fixed with soap and water
does not qualify as trouble.""
Amen! Kids and dirt are made for each other.
I have happy memories of many a mud pie from my own kidhood.
:)
Yes...
September 29 2012, 16:18:03 UTC 8 years ago
I have happy memories of many a mud pie from my own kidhood.<<
Yeah, I enjoyed playing in the mud too.