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Poem: "Hens and Flowers" - The Wordsmith's Forge
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Poem: "Hens and Flowers"
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je_reviens From: je_reviens Date: July 3rd, 2012 06:09 pm (UTC) (Link)
As I read this series, I think about smells and how what seems to smell ok to these characters would make me wretch.

A bunch of people working on a farm, living together, none of them wearing deodorant, and all really needing it. And in the summer - ugh!

A girl climbing into a manure pile and stirring the shit around while wearing her GOOD sweater. I've taught laundry programs to Girl Scouts. Cleaning clothes is HARD work, and when your wool sweater smells like shit, super UGH.

je_reviens From: je_reviens Date: July 3rd, 2012 06:10 pm (UTC) (Link)
I like this series and this is a good story/poem. Just my thoughts, above, as I read it.
je_reviens From: je_reviens Date: July 3rd, 2012 06:10 pm (UTC) (Link)
PS your poems dont seem like poems to me. They seem like stories with really short lines of text. Hence, story poems.
ysabetwordsmith From: ysabetwordsmith Date: July 3rd, 2012 11:36 pm (UTC) (Link)

Thoughts

Some of my poems are narrative poems. I write -- barely, because I don't like straight prose poems -- the full spectrum from poetry to prose. Some people feel that my free-verse poems read like poetry, others feel they read like prose. I do write differently in poetry than in prose, but sometimes the differences are more subtle than others.
ysabetwordsmith From: ysabetwordsmith Date: July 3rd, 2012 11:40 pm (UTC) (Link)

Thoughts

>>As I read this series, I think about smells and how what seems to smell ok to these characters would make me wretch.<<

Different people do vary. Me, I'm familiar enough with farm smells that I don't mind them.

>>A girl climbing into a manure pile and stirring the shit around while wearing her GOOD sweater. I've taught laundry programs to Girl Scouts. Cleaning clothes is HARD work, and when your wool sweater smells like shit, super UGH.<<

Well, not a fancy sweater for wearing to town; a practical sweater for everyday work outside before it's so cold as to require a coat. Also not a fresh manure pile: it's generating heat, so about halfway broken down. That smells more musty than anything else. However, wool does tend to absorb odors.

Let's say there are reasons why they have a whole team of women doing seamstress and washing work in the linen room!
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