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Poem: "Walking with the Witch-son" - The Wordsmith's Forge
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Poem: "Walking with the Witch-son"

Here is today's first freebie poem.  It was inspired by prompts from rowyn and moon_fox.  This is a sequel to "Fiorenza and the Witch-son," in which Fiorenza and Giacinto further explore the attraction and challenge of their relationship.  Visit the Serial Poetry page to learn more about this series.

Walking with the Witch-son

After the Fermo market closed for the day
Giacinto the striòs  turned to Fiorenza and said,
"Would you like to go walking with me?"

So the two of them strolled
through the narrow cobbled streets of the city,
not quite touching
but very conscious of each other's presence.

Giacinto bought a bouquet of flowers.
He tucked a cyclamen into his vest and
Fiorenza put orchids in the black curls of her hair.
She bought a packet of becciate  to share,
savoring the sweets made from raisins and pine nuts.

"It is a difficult thing," Giacinto said presently,
"to fancy someone who lives in another village."
"So it is," Fiorenza agreed.
Their long skirts swished against the stones of the street,
Giacinto's in deep marine blue, Fiorenza's in forest green.
For a time they walked in silence
except for the soft whisper of the fabric.

Fiorenza thought about her home,
the little cottage with its garden and orchard and
the precious glass house that sheltered the delicate plants.
She thought about Mad Ercole who lived with her,
and Don Candido who would wear himself out if allowed,
and all the other people who relied on her.
A wisewoman accepted a certain immobility
along with the privileges and duties of her station.

"I like you very much, Giacinto,
but I cannot leave my village," said Fiorenza.
"The people need me.  It is hard enough for them
to accept me so young,
after my mother and grandmother died."

"I understand," Giacinto said sadly.
"My mother is old and I cannot leave her.
My villagers count on me for much already.
It is hard enough for them
to accept a son instead of a daughter."

So they kissed cheeks and parted,
saying in chorus,
"See you next market day."

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thesilentpoet From: thesilentpoet Date: January 17th, 2012 11:01 pm (UTC) (Link)

So glad someone asked for this. I was hoping to see more of Giacinto. :)

(I also admit I meant to ask for it myself, but only managed to get the two prompts in before the fire alarm in my building went off, so really doubly glad someone did ask for this. Two someones, even!)

rowyn From: rowyn Date: January 18th, 2012 07:28 pm (UTC) (Link)
Giacinto is a cutie. :)
ysabetwordsmith From: ysabetwordsmith Date: January 18th, 2012 07:40 pm (UTC) (Link)


I think so too!

There are snippets of Fiorenza musing about how fine he looks, in some of the poems from this fishbowl, and his sweet personality as well as his looks. And of course the village louts are being loutish again, which makes Giacinto look better in comparison.
laffingkat From: laffingkat Date: January 18th, 2012 08:25 pm (UTC) (Link)
I'm glad these two are getting to spend some time together. It will be interesting watching to see what develops.
ysabetwordsmith From: ysabetwordsmith Date: January 18th, 2012 11:20 pm (UTC) (Link)


Fiorenza and Giacinto appear together in several poems from this session. It's fun to see how they work out when they can meet and what they can do together.

*chuckle* It occurs to me, this is the historic equivalent of a long-distance relationship, living in different villages. I've done that myself, and it's not easy; but if you can get past that, it's unlikely that anything else will ever break up the relationship.

Also, this is an example of my preference for concrete complications in romance plots or subplots. I don't like it when the characters just have a misunderstanding that can be handwaved at the end; it makes me think they're stupid. I look for real conflicts that characters will need to poke at for a while if they're going to find a solution. Fiorenza and Giacinto like each other, aren't willing to elope and abandon their posts, so they're starting to wonder what the heck to do with the situation.
eseme From: eseme Date: January 23rd, 2012 12:38 am (UTC) (Link)
That situation is rough. Having been in it, it's really rough.

That said, these two are very clever, and will no doubt figure something out.
ysabetwordsmith From: ysabetwordsmith Date: January 23rd, 2012 01:53 am (UTC) (Link)


It is difficult, and they are clever. I'm glad that people enjoy watching the story unfold.
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