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Poem: "Opening the Gate"
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ysabetwordsmith From: ysabetwordsmith Date: November 7th, 2011 02:11 am (UTC) (Link)

Re: YES!

*grin* I can see you bouncing and punching the air in a victory dance.

>>I am so glad this poem got published! I was so taken by it when I had read the back channel prompter copy.<<

This is good to hear.

>> I really enjoy the character development being shown, as well as demonstrating Ari as becoming more than just a sidekick, taking charge of the situation when needed. I recall something of my prompt for this, in which I expressed curiousity about how Shahana was benefiting from this unanticipated partnership; you handled that question very well. <<

Yes, this is the first time that Ari really has to step up and take charge because Shahana can't. It picks up on the hint in "A Night More Full" where Ari starts showing some initiative and compassion. To be a paladin is to be a leader, and the girl's got a long way to go before she'll be ready for that. But she has what it takes. Trust Gailah to look at a grubby root and see the bright blossom.

Oh, and the donor prompt session is unlocked now so people can click through and read the prompts for the poems if they wish.

>> There's so much else going on in this poem, too. For lack of a better word to describe it, it is very rich. I think it adds a great deal to the series, as well, including potential plot points and further directions for character development. <<

Yes, it's very dense. It tells more about the past and what changed, the dynamics of the gods and their followers, the ongoing damage and its effects on the world, a developing relationship, and how the individual characters are growing. You can also see how the series moves from mentioning Gorrein and his followers in passing, to showing them, to showing what they've done, and so forth; that's a deliberate progression. Later on, "Opening the Gate" connects with threads in "Stained" and "This Beaten Drum" among others.

I'm glad you enjoyed this.
the_vulture From: the_vulture Date: November 7th, 2011 09:34 am (UTC) (Link)

Re: YES!

Ya know, I'm really looking forward to reading about the first time Ari serves as the conduit for Gailah's power. I suspect it will be dramatic and very life altering (for more than just Ari).
ysabetwordsmith From: ysabetwordsmith Date: November 7th, 2011 06:43 pm (UTC) (Link)

Hmm...

That's an interesting point; I've made a note of it. So far, we've seen glimpses, here in this poem where Ari is praying to Gailah, and earlier in "To the Five Roads" when Shahana and Ari bless the shrine together. First major channeling of divine power without Shahana there to help, though -- that will be exciting. I think it's a ways ahead, though. Thanks for the tip!
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