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The Writing & Other Projects of Elizabeth Barrette
Poem: "The Picket Fence Committee" (revised)
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wyld_dandelyon From: wyld_dandelyon Date: September 9th, 2011 04:25 am (UTC) (Link)
Oh, yes! Much better.

If I may make a suggestion, I'd take the "with" out of this line, or say they wound up with snags in their pantyhose.

but both wound up with snagging their pantyhose.
ysabetwordsmith From: ysabetwordsmith Date: September 10th, 2011 05:13 am (UTC) (Link)


I deleted "with."
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