This poem was inspired and sponsored by marina_bonomi, who wondered what I might do with Cao Cao and Zhuge Liang. In my hands they turned into historic role models for the Kirigami Mage and the Origami Mage. And now we know where the rivalry really turned personal. This poem belongs to the Origami Mage series, coming after "ongaeshibanashi."
Cáo Jiāo the Dragon
was a master of water,
constant as the sea
people named him as
a military genius
or power-grabber
lightning-fast he struck,
but to temptation he was
ever unyielding
Kirigami Mage
took him for her role model,
history's mentor
she thought of him as
she wielded her bright scissors
to master paper
his wisdom and grace
inspired her young fingers:
dragon's fluid dance
Zhou Lóng the White Crane
was a wood master, patient
as a growing pine
people named him as
a most gifted diplomat
or else a coward
lightly did he move;
kindly he kept his balance
and others' as well
Origami Mage
chose him as her role model,
enlightened wizard
thus she dreamed of him
as her tender fingers made
fold and crease and fold
his tranquility
inspired her diligence:
crane's quiet courtship
no one remembers
who started it, only how
bitterly it burned
the two girls quarreled
over who served the better
master, as girls will
they turned their backs on
both constancy and kindness,
enfolding rancor
August 3 2011, 09:29:47 UTC 9 years ago
August 3 2011, 12:02:26 UTC 9 years ago
One thing, though, that nags at me, more for potential association than anything, is that Dragon should have been Snake (as, in Chinese martial arts, Snake is associated with Water). Had you used both Snake and Crane, you would have incorporated the animal symbols for the renowned Chinese combat system, Wing Chun (http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/History_of_Wing_Chun). /martial arts geek mode
August 3 2011, 13:48:45 UTC 9 years ago
Dragons are water spirits as well though, masters of the rain, rivers, lakes and oceans.
The 5 animals of Hongjiaquan are Dragon, Tiger, Crane, Snake and Leopard and there Dragon is for Water and Snake for Earth (this is in Italian, but you'll recognize the characters) http://it.wikipedia.org/wiki/Wuxingquan#Pugilato_delle_5_forme
August 4 2011, 01:28:45 UTC 9 years ago
Hmm...
August 5 2011, 22:24:40 UTC 9 years ago
Changing this aspect would give us a first line something like:
Cáo Jiāo the Serpent
or
Cáo Jiāo the Black Snake
So, what do you two folks think? You probably know more about Eastern traditions and symbolism than I do. Which works better for these characters and this poem, Dragon or Snake? I'm open to making changes if it will strengthen the piece.
Re: Hmm...
August 5 2011, 23:26:31 UTC 9 years ago
Snake, on the otherhand, is deceptively languid until it strikes with lightning speed. There's also lots of grasping. This may ALSO be appropriate for Cao Jiao.
Yeah, really helps to narrow it down some doesn't it. XD
Re: Hmm...
August 7 2011, 20:25:26 UTC 9 years ago
Re: Hmm...
August 7 2011, 20:43:40 UTC 9 years ago
Re: Hmm...
August 5 2011, 23:32:27 UTC 9 years ago
In traditional religion one of the strongest and most stressed roles for dragons that of givers of rains and rulers of bodies of water, from streams to rivers, from lakes to oceans http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Chinese_dragon#Ruler_of_weather_and_water
Re: Hmm...
August 7 2011, 20:24:49 UTC 9 years ago
Hmm...
August 5 2011, 22:25:48 UTC 9 years ago
August 3 2011, 15:47:00 UTC 9 years ago
Yes...
August 4 2011, 01:20:28 UTC 9 years ago
August 4 2011, 03:57:34 UTC 9 years ago
I enjoy the different poetry forms.
Thank you!
August 4 2011, 04:25:49 UTC 9 years ago
*nod* One advantage to the Eastern type of plot is that, in spiraling over the same concepts, you add layers with each iteration.
>>I enjoy the different poetry forms.<<
Yay! This series runs mostly to haiku and tanka verses.