This poem was inspired and sponsored by marina_bonomi, who wondered what I might do with Cao Cao and Zhuge Liang. In my hands they turned into historic role models for the Kirigami Mage and the Origami Mage. And now we know where the rivalry really turned personal. This poem belongs to the Origami Mage series, coming after "ongaeshibanashi."
Cáo Jiāo the Dragon
was a master of water,
constant as the sea
people named him as
a military genius
or power-grabber
lightning-fast he struck,
but to temptation he was
ever unyielding
Kirigami Mage
took him for her role model,
history's mentor
she thought of him as
she wielded her bright scissors
to master paper
his wisdom and grace
inspired her young fingers:
dragon's fluid dance
Zhou Lóng the White Crane
was a wood master, patient
as a growing pine
people named him as
a most gifted diplomat
or else a coward
lightly did he move;
kindly he kept his balance
and others' as well
Origami Mage
chose him as her role model,
enlightened wizard
thus she dreamed of him
as her tender fingers made
fold and crease and fold
his tranquility
inspired her diligence:
crane's quiet courtship
no one remembers
who started it, only how
bitterly it burned
the two girls quarreled
over who served the better
master, as girls will
they turned their backs on
both constancy and kindness,
enfolding rancor
Hmm...
August 5 2011, 22:24:40 UTC 9 years ago
Changing this aspect would give us a first line something like:
Cáo Jiāo the Serpent
or
Cáo Jiāo the Black Snake
So, what do you two folks think? You probably know more about Eastern traditions and symbolism than I do. Which works better for these characters and this poem, Dragon or Snake? I'm open to making changes if it will strengthen the piece.
Re: Hmm...
August 5 2011, 23:26:31 UTC 9 years ago
Snake, on the otherhand, is deceptively languid until it strikes with lightning speed. There's also lots of grasping. This may ALSO be appropriate for Cao Jiao.
Yeah, really helps to narrow it down some doesn't it. XD
Re: Hmm...
August 7 2011, 20:25:26 UTC 9 years ago
Re: Hmm...
August 7 2011, 20:43:40 UTC 9 years ago