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Poem: "Half-Baked Ideas"
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ysabetwordsmith From: ysabetwordsmith Date: July 8th, 2011 06:21 pm (UTC) (Link)

Yay!

>> Even though I no longer bake for a living, it's still in my soul, and this one touches me right there. <<

I'm happy to hear this. I bake at home sometimes, so that's helpful background.

>> I'm much with Brilla, too. I never cared to learn how to make the fancy cakes and pastries, I've only ever wanted to make good, simple bread and cookies. <<

*nod* In keeping with low fantasy, not everyone wants to be a hero or stand at the center of attention. Some people just want to do their job and take pride in their work. Very few people need fancy enchanted pastries, but everybody needs bread.

>> I love the bit about the broke Bards and the heat from the oven, too. Can't even really find words for it right now, but it's beautiful. <<

Hee! That's actually an outgrowth of my knowledge of history (bakeries were often made with an oven wall of stone or brick) and thermodynamics (certain oven materials have lots of thermal mass, so will radiate heat evenly and long), leading to the idea that a bakery would tend to create a warm spot attractive to chilled people. The fantasy twist is simply that it attracts apprentice bards (a riff on the starving musician) and that there's a way to harvest and use the ambient magic from their practice. That ties back to the low fantasy theme, too, in terms of using what you have and making do.
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ysabetwordsmith From: ysabetwordsmith Date: July 9th, 2011 03:37 am (UTC) (Link)

Re: Yay!

>>Ah, I didn't get that she was using the spillover magic from the Bards to make the little cakes.<<

Poem needs to be unpacked more, based on feedback. I may take a poke at revising this.

>> The rest, yeah, flows pretty naturally, though in places where it was typically that cold, I think the Ovens were generally placed as centrally in the building as possible, to keep the heat in. That's rather less than half-remembered, though, so don't quote me there.<<

Depends on the climate. Somewhere like Russia, yes; in fact they have ovens/stoves you can sleep on. Somehow. (I learned that in Russian class.) In most places, a full-size bakery oven generates more heat than is comfortable for a building to contain (especially in summer) so they are usually built on outer walls to allow radiant heat dispersal. That makes a warm spot on the far side of the wall. Sometimes this is used to heat areas where a flaming stove would be bad: a stable, a sickroom, children's playspace, etc. I'm positing Gloryroad Cross in a temperate region, and they haven't enclosed their warm spot, so it's just attracting chilled bystanders.

zianuray From: zianuray Date: July 26th, 2011 12:34 am (UTC) (Link)

Re: Yay!

I had gotten that the magic went into the pies, but then I'm a bit of a head-in-the-clouds, so that would fit.
ysabetwordsmith From: ysabetwordsmith Date: July 26th, 2011 02:16 am (UTC) (Link)

Re: Yay!

Generally if several people point out something as a flaw, I'll try to correct it -- and it looks like the connection between nutcakes and apprentice bards was originally not strong enough to be clear to everyone.
zianuray From: zianuray Date: July 26th, 2011 02:38 am (UTC) (Link)

Re: Yay!

*Heh* I'm used to being the odd one out :) (Not criticizing those who didn't get it, as it is possible I could have read too much in.)
je_reviens From: je_reviens Date: July 3rd, 2012 08:10 pm (UTC) (Link)

Re: Yay!

I didn't get that part either.

Still a cool story poem.
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