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Poetry Fishbowl Open!
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marina_bonomi From: marina_bonomi Date: July 5th, 2011 07:52 pm (UTC) (Link)
I see I'm too late for a grizzled barkeep prompt, oh, well!

Honestly I think that the knight in shining armor (aka paladin) is most often played (or written) horribly, like being 'good' took no effort at all, prayers were answered immediately, miracles and wonders were ready at the drop of a hat, faith was a given with no moments of doubt, temptation didn't exist and one hadn't to struggle with moral dilemmas and personal shortcomings.

Could we see what 'normal life' is like for a novice paladin in a low-magic world, with training, and lessons, and community life? or maybe could we have a glimpse of the thoughts of a world-weary paladin veteran, in the same low-magic world?
haikujaguar From: haikujaguar Date: July 5th, 2011 08:40 pm (UTC) (Link)
I like this idea. :)
the_vulture From: the_vulture Date: July 5th, 2011 08:47 pm (UTC) (Link)
SPARHAWK!!! :D

If you haven't already, try giving a read to David Edding's 'The Elenium' series. I find the 'paladins' of that setting very humorously worldly (if sometimes brutally so).
marina_bonomi From: marina_bonomi Date: July 6th, 2011 12:38 pm (UTC) (Link)
Thanks for the suggestion, I'll definitely look it up. :)
the_vulture From: the_vulture Date: July 6th, 2011 07:21 pm (UTC) (Link)
You're welcome. I found the series highly entertaining.
ysabetwordsmith From: ysabetwordsmith Date: July 5th, 2011 11:13 pm (UTC) (Link)

Poem

I've always enjoyed poems about worn paladins, because serving a deity is work that can rub the shiny off you real quick. And yet, that doesn't always happen in the ways people expect. "Shine On" is the story of Shahana the Paladin coming to a ruined village shortly after a raid, and helping to pick up the pieces, and picking up a traveling companion as well. Hidden within is the backstory of where Shahana's power comes from and why it is the way it is, and where its ultimate goal lies. This poem is written in unrhymed quatrains.

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marina_bonomi From: marina_bonomi Date: July 6th, 2011 12:37 pm (UTC) (Link)

Re: Poem

I've just sponsored it, but forgot to add a note to the donation.

If I can scrape something more this month it will go towards 'Fiorenza and the Witch's Son' but there's no guarantee...
ysabetwordsmith From: ysabetwordsmith Date: July 6th, 2011 06:50 pm (UTC) (Link)

Re: Poem

>>I've just sponsored it, but forgot to add a note to the donation.<<

Thank you! I have posted "Shine On" for you.

>>If I can scrape something more this month it will go towards 'Fiorenza and the Witch's Son' but there's no guarantee...<<

No worries; it will probably remain open for a while. You might also like to know that I've written another Fiorenza poem, "From the Free City," about the aftermath of a siege at Fermo. That one will become available after the previous poem is fully sponsored and posted.
marina_bonomi From: marina_bonomi Date: July 6th, 2011 06:57 pm (UTC) (Link)

Re: Poem

I have just commented on it, and I just want to add that I would like the opportunity to read more about Shahana and Ari, if the occasion arises.
...Not to mention that more Fiorenza is always a piece of good news. :)

Edited at 2011-07-06 06:59 pm (UTC)
ysabetwordsmith From: ysabetwordsmith Date: July 6th, 2011 07:21 pm (UTC) (Link)

Re: Poem

>> I have just commented on it, and I just want to add that I would like the opportunity to read more about Shahana and Ari, if the occasion arises. <<

Yes, there is plenty of potential in this storyline. Further exploration is welcome. It will be interesting to see how other folks respond, too. So far it seems to be high-impact.

>>...Not to mention that more Fiorenza is always a piece of good news. :) <<

*bow, flourish* Happy to be of service! When I get a chance, I'll list the next Fiorenza poem on the serial poetry page, so that folks will know it exists.
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