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Poem: "Mending Fence"

This poem belongs to the "Monster House" series, and you can read the related poems on the "Serial Poetry" page of my website.  It was inspired in large part by a thread under "Until the Cows Come Home," especially this comment from [info]kelkyag:

I was thinking there might be *quite* a bit of bumpiness after the time machine incident, given that before that the mother thought the grandmother was senile. How do you bring up a topic like that twenty or thirty years overdue, with all the misunderstandings they've been dancing around or tripping over all that time?

It was sponsored by eseme.

Mending Fence


The card says "Happy Mother's Day" above a picture
of pink peonies and purple lilacs blooming over
a white picket fence with one slat missing.  Inside ...

     Dear Mama,

      I love you and I wish we could see each other more often.  Maybe we could get together for coffee next Sunday?  I think we have a lot to talk about.  Thank you for helping your granddaughter with her science project, though it would have been nice to know about that in advance.  I'm happy to see that your hobby is working out better these days.  I'd like to hear more about that too.

     Love,
     Your Little Princess

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my_partner_doug From: my_partner_doug Date: May 7th, 2011 06:58 pm (UTC) (Link)
I can't help but wonder if there's more behind that signature than an affectionate nickname...
kelkyag From: kelkyag Date: May 7th, 2011 07:07 pm (UTC) (Link)
O_o This really is the series wherein each installment raises more questions than it answers.
ysabetwordsmith From: ysabetwordsmith Date: May 7th, 2011 07:11 pm (UTC) (Link)

Yes...

Plotbunnies: we're doing them right.
kelkyag From: kelkyag Date: May 7th, 2011 11:32 pm (UTC) (Link)
It's certainly a different plot structure from Fiorenza, which is almost fixed-state -- an interesting problem falls in her lap, she fixes it -- or the origami & kirigami mages, whose story seems to be about the two of them, with other characters only passing through.
ysabetwordsmith From: ysabetwordsmith Date: May 7th, 2011 11:55 pm (UTC) (Link)

Hmm...

That's an interesting observation. I think you've got a point about the different plot structures. Of course, part of the thing with Fiorenza's series is that it's newer; it hasn't had as much time yet for problems or side characters to start reappearing.
kelkyag From: kelkyag Date: May 8th, 2011 01:08 am (UTC) (Link)
The Fiorenza poems so far are not obviously ordered, except by the expressed-in-comments notion that the fate know her by reputation by the most recent poem, where the Monster House and Origami Mage poems have a clear temporal order -- but now Monster House is branching out to follow other characters, and the original narrator doesn't appear at all in the most recent pieces. I'm tempted to liken the Fiorenza series to an episodic TV series, Monster House to a soap opera (with potential for spinoff series), and Origami Mage to a stand-alone novel. Having said that, I'm sure things will change. :)
ysabetwordsmith From: ysabetwordsmith Date: May 8th, 2011 01:25 am (UTC) (Link)

Thoughts

>> The Fiorenza poems so far are not obviously ordered, except by the expressed-in-comments notion that the fate know her by reputation by the most recent poem <<

The flow is subtler there, yes. I did figure that "Can She Bake a Scary Pie?" logically preceded "Fair Maiden Meets Fierce Villain." Over time, people become more accustomed to turning to her for help and thus more respectful of her because they've seen her solve more problems.

>> I'm tempted to liken the Fiorenza series to an episodic TV series,<<

That makes sense. I've watched a number of historic TV shows, and I enjoy them.

>> Monster House to a soap opera (with potential for spinoff series),<<

0_o ZOMG, it is. I had not thought of it that way, but it is. Clearly my mother's fond recollections of watching Dark Shadows have rubbed off on me more than I realized.

>> and Origami Mage to a stand-alone novel. <<

Yeah, that makes sense too. It's the only one with a very clear beginning and end, and a strongly guiding plot arc.

>>Having said that, I'm sure things will change. <<

That's possible. Part of what broke Monster House out of the primary narrator's viewpoint was that it won the poll for last month's bonus poem, and the original inspiration for that perk included the option to explore side stories and bit characters. Since Fiorenza won this month's poll for an extra series poem, that might broaden the field there too -- or not.
kelkyag From: kelkyag Date: May 8th, 2011 01:33 am (UTC) (Link)
The too-perfect neighbors moving in pushed the "soap opera" button, for me. I'm not sure I'd've said that earlier.

... and I don't know how I forgot about Scary Pie.
ysabetwordsmith From: ysabetwordsmith Date: May 8th, 2011 01:43 am (UTC) (Link)

Well...

>>The too-perfect neighbors moving in pushed the "soap opera" button, for me. I'm not sure I'd've said that earlier.<<

Blame aldersprig for that. ;) Where else could I possibly have put them?
ysabetwordsmith From: ysabetwordsmith Date: May 7th, 2011 07:10 pm (UTC) (Link)

Well...

Good catch. I wondered what the lines of tension in that family might be. One of them is that Grandma hoped for more ladylike offspring and was a bit disappointed with the level of geekiness that emerged. So that signature is in the nature of an olive branch.

Whether there's actual royalty involved ... well, with this setting, anything is possible.
eseme From: eseme Date: May 7th, 2011 11:36 pm (UTC) (Link)
Oh, that is co cool!

I totally want to be a fly on the wall for that lunch!
ysabetwordsmith From: ysabetwordsmith Date: May 7th, 2011 11:53 pm (UTC) (Link)

Thank you!

>> Oh, that is co cool! <<

I'm glad you like this.

>>I totally want to be a fly on the wall for that lunch!<<

It could go so many different ways ...
bkwrrm_tx From: bkwrrm_tx Date: August 4th, 2011 09:59 pm (UTC) (Link)
I'm not a poetry lover, in general, but I'm devouring and adoring the Monster House series. Thank you for bringing them into my life.
ysabetwordsmith From: ysabetwordsmith Date: August 4th, 2011 11:36 pm (UTC) (Link)

You're welcome!

I'm especially thrilled when someone not generally fond of poetry gets hooked into it because of what I'm writing. There is good poetry in the world; sometimes it just takes a while to find the stuff you'll like.

Monster House is in the poll for the extra series fishbowl; feel free to vote in that.
http://ysabetwordsmith.livejournal.com/1826769.html
fayanora From: fayanora Date: August 5th, 2011 11:38 am (UTC) (Link)
This series makes me grin. :-D
ysabetwordsmith From: ysabetwordsmith Date: August 5th, 2011 05:18 pm (UTC) (Link)

Yay!

It's fun to have a series that blends different tones and genres. Some of the poems are quite dark, but others are light and funny.
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