Here is the extra freebie poem from the "Monster House" series, based on meeting the $150 goal in the April 2011 Poetry Fishbowl. The prompt came from aldersprig who wanted to see more of Grandma. (I got some good ideas from other prompts too.) This is the first poem written from a different viewpoint than our primary narrator, and it features a young girl exploring Grandma's kitchen ... and beyond.
You can read the other "Monster House" poems on the "Serial Poetry" page of my website.
Grandma's Kitchen
Grandma's kitchen smells of cinnamon
and baking bread and ripe bananas,
but underneath the cooking smells, there is
a tang of oil like what goes on a sewing machine
only it doesn't come from any of the appliances.
Grandma's kitchen is full of windows
that let in the sun,
falling in warm rectangles over the table
and lying against my cheek like flannel,
but there's a spot, one spot,
on the floor that always feels cold.
When I was five,
my little fingers found the hidden catch
behind the refrigerator
that opened the door in the floor.
My seeing-eye gremlin led me
down the secret staircase,
the boards creaking underfoot.
Grandma's laboratory
was a big basement under the house,
full of soft clicks and whirrs and beeps.
I could see only two things there:
my faithful gremlin
and a pile of light like blocks stuck together,
turning and turning in the air
as cubes and angles swallowed each other.
Then Grandma found me
and shooed me back upstairs.
She made me promise
not to talk about what I'd seen
down there.
I said I would,
if she'd promise
to show me more.
"When you're older, lovey,"
she said to me,
"we'll see about that."
Grandma's kitchen is a good place
for learning to cook,
and it's easier now that I have
the Eye of Fate to give me
a shadowy vision of the room around me.
Grandma's laboratory waits below.
Sometimes she brings up things to share,
strange gizmos with rounded corners
and warm hexagonal buttons
that I'm not supposed to press yet.
Sometimes I can glimpse inside them
a hovering spark of energy,
bright as the tumbling blocks in the basement.
The rest of the family
doesn't think any of her inventions work,
and I want to argue with them
but Grandma always shushes me
and piles more food on the kitchen table.
"Shh, lovey," she says to me.
"Wait and see."
April 14 2011, 20:49:10 UTC 10 years ago
Yay!
April 14 2011, 21:41:08 UTC 10 years ago
Thank you. I like exploring family dynamics.
>> and the way the child describes the rooms using non-visual descriptors first, spot on! <<
I'm glad it worked!
I have a number of characters who perceive the world through different senses than usual, or a different order of priorities. So for blind characters, their experiences focus first on sounds, scents, and textures (not necessarily in that order) distantly followed by whatever bits of visual input they might have. It gives the storytelling a very different effect from the usual, which is visual first and then audio. Conversely my deaf characters tend to focus on visual motion and tactile input first, with sound manifesting as vibrations. After going through all kinds of alien species with wildly different senses, juggling the priority of human perceptions to account for handicaps is pretty simple.
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Thank you!
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April 14 2011, 21:11:06 UTC 10 years ago
Yay!
April 14 2011, 21:42:35 UTC 10 years ago
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April 15 2011, 01:23:58 UTC 10 years ago
Yay!
April 15 2011, 02:26:17 UTC 10 years ago
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April 15 2011, 01:27:59 UTC 10 years ago
I do like that kitchen, and the description of the smells particularly.
Thank you!
April 15 2011, 02:25:19 UTC 10 years ago
I think each kitchen has its own unique combination of ingrained smells, based on what kinds of things are most often cooked there. The pattern becomes part of the room's identity.
April 15 2011, 01:45:34 UTC 10 years ago
I'm really enjoying this family and their quirks and such.
Thank you!
April 15 2011, 02:28:58 UTC 10 years ago
April 15 2011, 04:59:53 UTC 10 years ago
Thank you!
April 15 2011, 05:32:37 UTC 10 years ago
April 15 2011, 13:13:58 UTC 10 years ago
You're welcome!
April 15 2011, 18:44:10 UTC 10 years ago
April 16 2011, 04:58:30 UTC 10 years ago
Thank you!
April 16 2011, 05:22:03 UTC 10 years ago
I'm glad that I managed to touch that note with a lot of people.
>> And the sensory descriptions are really well done. I look forward to learning more about these two! <<
Yay! I'm happy to hear that.
August 5 2011, 11:34:39 UTC 9 years ago
"Wait and see."
I can't wait to see!