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Poem: "Getting the News"

If you've read some of the earlier Monster House poems, "Sticky Fingers" and "Secondhand Sight," you know that the family grows over time.  For Valentine's Day, I'm pleased to present a poem about discovering the pregnancy.  Poem sponsored by janetmiles. Series sponsor ladymondegreen.


Getting the News


The monster from the closet shook me awake,
his clawed hand careful but urgent on my shoulder.

"You better get to the bathroom,"
he said to me.

I rubbed the sleep from my eyes,
peering blearily through the window
at the pale yellow sky.

"Why?" I mumbled.

"Your sweetheart needs you," he said,
dragging me toward the bedroom door
without even letting me grab a bathrobe.

"What time's it?" I said.
"What's so important?"

"The sun rose ten minutes ago,"
said the monster from the closet,
"which means that it is morning  now."

Just then,
the sound of retching
came through the bathroom door.

I ran the rest of the way.

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kelkyag From: kelkyag Date: February 14th, 2011 09:12 pm (UTC) (Link)
Heh.

I'm curious how the monster in the closet happened to be the one awake to notice, where the main character apparently slept through his(?) lover getting out of bed in a hurry. Are closet monsters normally awake at this hour? I would think of dawn as bedtime for such a critter, and this as a late-arrising issue it needed to get someone else to handle so that it could crash.
e_scapism101 From: e_scapism101 Date: February 14th, 2011 09:29 pm (UTC) (Link)
Well, yeah - he was on his way back to the closet to go to sleep and they passed in the hallway.
ysabetwordsmith From: ysabetwordsmith Date: February 14th, 2011 10:32 pm (UTC) (Link)

Well...

>> I'm curious how the monster in the closet happened to be the one awake to notice, <<

I believe he can appear in any closet of the house, but "Home Shriek Home" establishes his access to the bathroom closet due to the towel scene.
http://ysabetwordsmith.livejournal.com/966888.html

I'm not sure whether closet monsters are nocturnal or diurnal or what. All the monsters seem to have a pretty good innate awareness of human proximity, though. They wouldn't be much use as monsters if humans could easily catch them napping.
e_scapism101 From: e_scapism101 Date: February 14th, 2011 09:29 pm (UTC) (Link)
Moar Monster House! (I got teary.)
ysabetwordsmith From: ysabetwordsmith Date: February 14th, 2011 10:36 pm (UTC) (Link)

Yay!

I'm always pleased when my poems affect someone strongly.
aldersprig From: aldersprig Date: February 14th, 2011 10:56 pm (UTC) (Link)
/Good/ monster!

Moar!
ysabetwordsmith From: ysabetwordsmith Date: February 14th, 2011 11:11 pm (UTC) (Link)

Yay!

I'm glad you like this.

No doubt there will be more in this series. It's gathering fans and momentum.
eseme From: eseme Date: February 15th, 2011 01:01 am (UTC) (Link)
Oh man, that's great. "It's morning now" is possibly the best line ever.

This is a great series.
ysabetwordsmith From: ysabetwordsmith Date: February 15th, 2011 01:12 am (UTC) (Link)

Yay!

>>Oh man, that's great. "It's morning now" is possibly the best line ever.<<

I was hoping that line would lift the penny nice and high before letting it drop.

>>This is a great series.<<

*bask, preen*
eseme From: eseme Date: February 15th, 2011 01:17 am (UTC) (Link)

Re: Yay!

*grins*

I really like the voice, and the urban fantasy vibe.
ysabetwordsmith From: ysabetwordsmith Date: February 15th, 2011 01:24 am (UTC) (Link)

Re: Yay!

>>I really like the voice, and the urban fantasy vibe.<<

I'm having fun with the way this series lets me look at the normal side of weird and the weird side of normal, often right next to each other. That's a core advantage of urban fantasy. It's also neat to look at the aspects of each character's tolerances, what they accept blithely vs. what makes them go yeek.
the_vulture From: the_vulture Date: February 15th, 2011 05:13 am (UTC) (Link)
This poem is very happy making. :)
the_vulture From: the_vulture Date: February 15th, 2011 05:23 am (UTC) (Link)
...And I just went back to reread the rest of the series. :)
ysabetwordsmith From: ysabetwordsmith Date: February 15th, 2011 06:30 am (UTC) (Link)

Yay!

I love it when people get pulled into rereading a series, after they read the latest installment.

... I do that too, sometimes, when I'm looking up the links for these things.
ysabetwordsmith From: ysabetwordsmith Date: February 15th, 2011 05:35 am (UTC) (Link)

Thank you!

I'm glad I could make you smile.
the_vulture From: the_vulture Date: February 15th, 2011 06:58 am (UTC) (Link)

Re: Thank you!

Hee!

Of course, there's some serious irony to be found in such sentimentality being evoked by someone getting violently ill. :)
ysabetwordsmith From: ysabetwordsmith Date: February 15th, 2011 07:11 am (UTC) (Link)

Re: Thank you!

Well, it's not so much the action, as the implication behind it. Nobody likes morning sickness, but most people love babies.
the_vulture From: the_vulture Date: February 15th, 2011 08:07 am (UTC) (Link)

Re: Thank you!

I fail at comedy. XD
ysabetwordsmith From: ysabetwordsmith Date: February 15th, 2011 08:11 am (UTC) (Link)

Re: Thank you!

For me, humor comes and goes. When it comes, it usually works quite well. But I can't easily summon it on purpose. It follows its own whim. I have somewhat better steering with other tones. I enjoy writing humor when it comes to me, though -- sometimes I laugh out loud over what my characters say and do.
fayanora From: fayanora Date: August 5th, 2011 12:28 pm (UTC) (Link)
I like the way the monster emphasizes "morning." :-D
ysabetwordsmith From: ysabetwordsmith Date: August 5th, 2011 06:48 pm (UTC) (Link)

Yes...

That's a pacing maneuver. If it works just right, the reader will wonder what the big deal is about "morning" and then make the connection about the same time as the narrator.
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