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Poem: "folded wings"

This poem came out of yesterday's Poetry Fishbowl.  It was inspired by a prompt from marina_bonomi and sponsored by minor_architectOrigami is a traditional art created by folding paper, and is associated with oriental magic in some legends.


folded wings


origami cranes
lift their paper heads to bring
health, peace, and long life

tigers flick striped tails,
threatening swift death with a
thousand paper cuts

green pheasants ferry
thoughts and souls and emotions
then fold paper wings

paper dragons guard
maps, deeds, contracts, bonds, and cash:
strange painted treasures

origami mage
folds her hands inside her sleeves,
hiding a small smile

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jenny_evergreen From: jenny_evergreen Date: March 3rd, 2010 07:17 pm (UTC) (Link)
Oh, man, now I both want to BE an origami mage and read a series of a novels about one, which is a tad more likely. :)
ysabetwordsmith From: ysabetwordsmith Date: March 3rd, 2010 07:49 pm (UTC) (Link)

Wow!

I'm glad this poem touched you so much.
jenny_evergreen From: jenny_evergreen Date: March 3rd, 2010 08:05 pm (UTC) (Link)

Re: Wow!

It's times like these I wish I'd been a writer after all...I'd love to see this character and her adventures. :)
ysabetwordsmith From: ysabetwordsmith Date: March 3rd, 2010 09:15 pm (UTC) (Link)

Well...

If you're that attached to her, you can always drop her in as a prompt in subsequent fishbowls whenever you can think of a way to connect her with the current theme. I have "high fantasy" penciled in for April, so that's a possibility. The fishbowls have been running long enough that I have some characters and settings that recur through several poems.
jenny_evergreen From: jenny_evergreen Date: March 4th, 2010 03:35 am (UTC) (Link)

Re: Well...

I will keep try to do that! Thanks! :)
ladymondegreen From: ladymondegreen Date: March 3rd, 2010 08:07 pm (UTC) (Link)
There is a book called Paper Mage on this topic, but I think it's a stand-alone.
jenny_evergreen From: jenny_evergreen Date: March 4th, 2010 03:36 am (UTC) (Link)
Cool! I'll check it out, thank you!
From: minor_architect Date: March 3rd, 2010 07:23 pm (UTC) (Link)
I'm glad I could sponsor this one. Very nice! :)
ysabetwordsmith From: ysabetwordsmith Date: March 3rd, 2010 07:48 pm (UTC) (Link)

Thank you!

I'm glad you like this.
marina_bonomi From: marina_bonomi Date: March 3rd, 2010 09:21 pm (UTC) (Link)
I was ninjaed in sponsoring this one but I'm really glad it came out of my prompt, and yes, I too want to know more about her. I want her to have a name, a face and a story.

And, oh boy! There is origami (folded paper) and there is kirigami (cut paper), both forms of traditional art. I think I have my prompt for the next fishbowl already...
From: minor_architect Date: March 4th, 2010 01:17 am (UTC) (Link)
I was ninjaed in sponsoring this one but I'm really glad it came out of my prompt

Oops! I hope I didn't step on your toes by sponsoring this poem, instead? I did check again the next day (in U.S. hours, anyway) to see if you would get to it first. :)
marina_bonomi From: marina_bonomi Date: March 4th, 2010 07:17 am (UTC) (Link)
Oh no, sorry if that sounded wrong, you didn't step on my toes. It was more a declaration of intent *and* a comment on timing...I'd been out most of the day for work and when I finally went to sponsor the poem it looked like you *just* had done it.

I should have phrased the comment better, sorry!
ysabetwordsmith From: ysabetwordsmith Date: March 4th, 2010 01:23 am (UTC) (Link)

Hmm...

If you and minor_architect are amenable, I could list you both as co-sponsors of this poem. All it would take is a little behind-the-scenes change in bookkeeping to indicate half toward this, half toward general fund.

You are certainly welcome to chip in more ideas about the origami mage!
marina_bonomi From: marina_bonomi Date: March 4th, 2010 07:19 am (UTC) (Link)

Re: Hmm...

No need for extra work for you! It was bad phrasing on my part I did not mean to sound upset. It was meant more as a declaration of intent.

And there definitely will be more prompts about her (no, that's *not* a threat).
From: oakwind Date: March 4th, 2010 05:20 pm (UTC) (Link)
I really love the imagery here and how it connects to the particular origami pattern. My daughter-in-law makes cranes and Kawasaki roses. Thanks for sharing. And while it doesn't mean much at this point you are one of the people on my list for the time I have extra money (I am sure it will happen one of these days:)
ysabetwordsmith From: ysabetwordsmith Date: March 4th, 2010 05:45 pm (UTC) (Link)

Thank you!

By all means, point your daughter-in-law to this poem, if you think she would enjoy it.

Any time you have an extra dollar or few is fine. Meanwhile you can help by giving me prompts and by posting about the Poetry Fishbowl so other folks find out about it.
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ysabetwordsmith From: ysabetwordsmith Date: March 4th, 2010 11:50 pm (UTC) (Link)

Yes...

I needed something to connect the disparate pieces and show how they came to their power.

Thank goodness she didn't know this pattern:
http://www.neatorama.com/2007/07/28/cthulhu-origami/
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filkferengi From: filkferengi Date: March 8th, 2010 10:39 pm (UTC) (Link)
Have you been listening to "Cranes Over Hiroshima" again?

:)
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