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Poem: "The Godfather"
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siege From: siege Date: February 12th, 2012 01:01 am (UTC) (Link)
Do not drop a candle,
For yours may be shortened thereby.
Spill not the holy things, but
Sprinkle or pour with intention
That the blessing may enter with force
And deliberation --
Never clumsiness or foolishness.
And lay not your hat upon the bed,
For sleep and endings may climb within
And work upon your mind.
the_vulture From: the_vulture Date: February 12th, 2012 01:07 am (UTC) (Link)
That really sheds light on Death's advice. Did you write that?
siege From: siege Date: February 12th, 2012 01:18 am (UTC) (Link)
I did, though without references, so I may have these beliefs a little bit sideways. Also, I could have separated the subjects into verses and written the last one a little more poetically with reference to the "candle" or "light" of the mind.
the_vulture From: the_vulture Date: February 12th, 2012 01:58 am (UTC) (Link)
You've always the right to amend and develop it, but, regardless, nicely done!
ysabetwordsmith From: ysabetwordsmith Date: February 12th, 2012 02:52 am (UTC) (Link)

Wow!

This is beautiful! Thank you so much for sharing.

I think it might benefit from stanza breaks to highlight the different points of advice, but on the whole, it works.

I'll link this in the "Extra" for Fiorenza.
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