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Poem: "Apology to a Daughter Once Removed"

This poem came out of the July 6, 2010 Poetry Fishbowl.  It was sponsored by valdary and funded out of general donations, selected by the audience in a poll.  This is a prose poem, which I rarely write, but it seemed apt for this concept. 

Apology to a Daughter Once Removed


     Dear Anastasia,

     It's strange what cloning has done to family structure.  Cloned from my daughter, you are my daughter and yet not my daughter: my daughter once removed.  You are my granddaughter and yet not my granddaughter: my granddaughter once returned.  It does not diminish my love for you in the least, but it does add to the confusion. 

     I would say that I'm sorry to have begotten someone so selfish that she wouldn't even involve a husband in the process of becoming a mother -- but I find that I cannot criticize my daughter without spilling some on you, flesh of her flesh and nobody else's.  I would say that I'm sorry, but what I really am is guilty, because in fact I'm not  sorry for a second chance to watch that first step and see the same sweet gap-toothed smile once again.
 
     I just wanted you to know that when I said to your mother, a hundred times if I said it once, "I hope you have a daughter just like you someday," I did not mean it literally.

     Love,
     Nana

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ideealisme From: ideealisme Date: July 12th, 2010 10:45 pm (UTC) (Link)
Haha! That last line made me grin.
ysabetwordsmith From: ysabetwordsmith Date: July 12th, 2010 10:53 pm (UTC) (Link)

Yay!

I'm glad you liked it.
ravan From: ravan Date: July 12th, 2010 10:57 pm (UTC) (Link)
The last line is what had me chuckling - the exasperated, yet affectionate tone.
ysabetwordsmith From: ysabetwordsmith Date: July 12th, 2010 11:07 pm (UTC) (Link)

Thank you!

That's what family ties are all about. ;)
unmutual From: unmutual Date: July 13th, 2010 12:28 am (UTC) (Link)
Haha, that's great!
eseme From: eseme Date: July 13th, 2010 01:21 am (UTC) (Link)
This one amused me so much. What a great letter. Thanks!
ysabetwordsmith From: ysabetwordsmith Date: July 13th, 2010 01:28 am (UTC) (Link)

Yay!

I'm happy to hear this.
aldersprig From: aldersprig Date: July 13th, 2010 02:41 am (UTC) (Link)
Love it. Love how much you slipped into such a short piece, and the amusing sci-fi take on a line I, at least, have heard more than once.
ysabetwordsmith From: ysabetwordsmith Date: July 13th, 2010 06:06 pm (UTC) (Link)

Thank you!

Yes, one of my favorite techniques in speculative fiction is to take something ordinary and bend it into science fiction or fantasy.
aldersprig From: aldersprig Date: July 13th, 2010 06:07 pm (UTC) (Link)

Re: Thank you!

I love it a lot!

Contemplating your poetry fishbowl model as I look at my autumnal expenses.
ysabetwordsmith From: ysabetwordsmith Date: July 13th, 2010 06:13 pm (UTC) (Link)

Go for it!

If you decide to try a fishbowl, let me know and I'll pimp it for you. I like turning people on to new and interesting projects.
ladymondegreen From: ladymondegreen Date: July 13th, 2010 05:54 pm (UTC) (Link)
Nicely done!
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